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November 08, 2005
SLAM
"SLAM"
Unlock
Unwind
Uncover
Undo
Understand.
Distances and fright
Between Red and Yellow
Black and white
These, the categories
What about the stories?
Ever think
To ask?
Smash
Smile
Seize
Sculpt
See.
Choice, but
Not a chance.
Slam—doors close.
Posted by lcishagan at November 8, 2005 05:23 PM
Comments
Lovely rhythms in this one Ariel....I like the trajectory from "opening" words to closing...
nice job.
Posted by: Ellen Grabiner at November 8, 2005 07:09 PM
I loved how you used words that started with U and then words that started with an S. This gave the poetry some continuity and really brought your point across. Good Job!
--Yasmin
Posted by: yasmin at November 8, 2005 07:47 PM
I have to second what Yasmin said. I really like your prompt. And I couldn't help noticing that the way you set up your piece makes it look like the profile of a bunny. (Yes, I notice stuff like that)..
Posted by: lauren Searls at November 8, 2005 11:25 PM